http://a-silent-due.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] a-silent-due.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] thatrainbowcity 2009-11-27 08:53 am (UTC)

I actually think I've been seen a bit more of Cain's bite lately (or maybe it's just that Kanda invites it XDDDD), which makes me really happy, because that's the only thing I fear re: characters who've been in the City for a while - just how strongly acclimation will have dulled their original personality. I'm liking Cain's progress here.

Iiiiiiiiiiii selfishly wish there were a bit more of Hawkeye around? ;o; I think you're doing nicely with him, and I do enjoy seeing my favourite characters played nicely ;; (2)

I think that honestly, as an overall, the only crit I can bring you is that sometimes your character voices can blend a very little bit. It's not a very strong feeling, but I think it might not hurt to experiment a bit more with language patterns - perhaps not make them all as longwinded, or introduce certain verbal ticks? It might just be me, tho!

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