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To the best of my abilities, I'll keep an ongoing and alphabetical list of everyone's HMD comments here below for your browsing pleasure.

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Alex (Rosella) Alms (Brian, Allison, Neil, Frankie, Tommy) Ary (Raphael) Ashley (Jack) Audrey (Olivia, Amory) Bon (Mr. Orange, Jerry) Caru (Cain, Poncho-kun, Katan) Cass (Slick) Cella (Mae, Sif) Chris (Pepper) Christa (Gabriel) Cricket (Akira) Dawn (Mara, Cinna, Haji) Ellie (Ginny) Emma (Howard) Eppy (Natasha, Simon) Eri (Faith, Castile, Donna, McGonagall) Faith (Fred, Molly) Gadgets (Ariadne, Mr. Blonde) Haunt (Euphemia)	Inji (Percy J.) Jaina (Roxas) Jane (Yuri, Tony) Jansen (10, Harry) Jessi (Akito/Agito/Lind) KaOS (Evil Ed) Katie (Peter) Katya (Pig) Katya II (Karl) Kaye (Marta) Kestrel (Elmer) Kimmeh! (Ikki) Kris (Sam) Kristi (Dean, Buffy, Lucy, Rose) Laura (William) Lee (Huey) Liam (Arya, Nathan) Lila (Tyr) Lisa (Dawn, Derek, Jenny) Lysoke (Cassian, Glenn) Mai (Rain, Mercy) Marion (Stephen, Dulcie, George) Melon (Saya) Mici (Saya, Eden, Capt. America, Mr. Pink, Billy, Edmund) Molly (Dr. House, Mr. White) Mouse (Charlie) Nao (Gazelle) Neko (Ken, Setsuna) Nelly (Eames) Nyte (Solomon, Rido, Piglet) Parsnip (Liam) Pixy (Chase)	Rae (Wilson, Todd, Doc Brown) Raine (Estellise, Akane) Rey (Kira) Rizu (Break, Hazuki) Rumi (Liz) Ruxi (Rosiel) Sarah (Bucky, 11) Setine (Thor) Tam (Curt, Teddy, Sparrow) Taryn (Alisha) Thorn (Kazuma) Tona (Tessa, Amy, The Archive, Rhodey) Toss (Merlin) Val (Elliot) Valya (Raymond, Jack, Robert) Veda (Justin, Penny, Chekov) Vee (Carla, Marie, Anna) Yuki/KGaara (Aion, Klarth) Zekoi (Mithos) Zen (Rita)

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Player name: Tona
Characters played:

Tessa Gray ☆ The Infernal Devices ☆ likeboudica
Amy Pond ☆ Doctor Who ☆ waitedforyears
The Archive ☆ The Dresden Files ☆ archivy
James "Rhodey" Rhodes ☆ Iron Man ☆ warmachine

Personal concrit link: i should really make one...
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Other comments? If those who've played with him on memes would also like to comment on Saito (

notourist), I'd be happy for all the crit on him. Still not sure whether I'll bring him in, but... 's likely.

Other than that, constructive crit is always very welcome. Some of these pups (Tessa, Amy, Ivy sort of) I've had for a while now, hopefully their voices are still there and I play them consistently.... Just. Any comments, questions, advice... I'd be happy for it ♥

I think you do a really good job with Rhodey and Saito in terms of their actions, decisions and points of view - and even though I don't... know... pretty much anything about Tessa, Ivy or Amy's canons, I can still see where these girls are coming from, when I read your threads!

My one suggestion would be to maybe study their speech patterns a bit more, individualize them, play around with their voices - especially since you play a lot of characters right now, there is sometimes the dangers of their not coming off a little flat, or too much alike. It's nothing huge, just something to be aware of.

Good job as a whole, I think, and I hope to get to tag you more!

Thank you! You're absolutely right, the voice patterns are something I need to pay attention to. I didn't really notice until I commented on other peoples' HMDs that they were doing a good job on keeping the voices distinct, but now that I think about it, I feel that their voices are bleeding together too much in my head (and therefore also on paper, so to speak). It's definitely time to do a canon-review to get their voices properly distinct again. I'll make sure to pay special attention to that in the future, so thank you ;;

I think it's difficult to keep them apart when you play quite a few, cause there's also the "narrating" voice (yours) that's supraimposed, so - don't... blame yourself 100% T_T

In my experience, at least: it really helps to introduce verbal ticks, or phrases you associate with the character, or even a voice in your head.

Voices....

...in....

....your head.....

.................................rightee-oh.

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waitedforyears - 2012-03-09 10:53 (UTC) - Expand

you know i adore your tessa! she's one of the main reasons i came back to poly (which is a really weird sentence now that i think about BUT NEVERMIND...), and i'm just. so relieved that things are working out better re: their interactions now that i don't have such a pain in the arse canon point. i'm pretty sure there was something specific i wanted to say, but i can't remember what it was 8(

i'm glad we had that plurk convo t'other day, and honestly, if there's ever anything concerning/worrying you, DON'T WORRY ABOUT BRINGING IT UP. we have v. similar opinions on the tid characters and books in general, so i doubt it would ever cause any problems re: play. i'm really glad that you're willing — and want — to develop tessa in ways that are realistic and in some ways, i guess, braver than anything that cc seems willing to do with her in canon — because tessa is a strong character, even if cc doesn't always do a good job of portraying it.

(also lmao, i will be so entertained if tessa ends up getting over will before he gets over her. BUT THAT'S NOT REALLY RELATED TO ANYTHING CONCRIT-Y.)

i'm so happy that you enjoy playing her and yes, i'm really glad as well that will's no longer at a point where he's basically just ignoring tessa. though i also think that it was really interesting to see that play out and that it's influenced her perception of him considerably, so it was def. not a bad thing that he used to be from a different canon point. but i think maybe now, especially if tessa develops the way that i want her to, they can eventually learn to at least be friends and that would be pretty damn fantastic for these two characters, i think, so— yeah. we've talked about her characterisation and clockwork prince and developments a lot and i'm pretty happy with my headspace regarding tessa at the moment, and i'm so so glad that we agree on the main issues with the canon ;; i think i'll go re-read passages of CA to make sure her voice is properly hers, but ... for the most part, i'm happy with her.

... I had a point, but I lost it.

(yeah, that would be amusing. but then, she's spend long enough pining after him aslkdjaljs)

Baby. Baby. You are wonderful, have I told you that you're wonderful? Amy is a precious snowflake and Bucky adores her, and Eleven would quite happily do anything for her. I love her friendly dynamic with my muses and her fierce protectiveness. She's just so brilliant.

I know I mostly play with Rhodey outside of here, but he is SO FUCKING AMAZING. HE IS WONDERFUL. I would marry and keep him.

I need to tag Tessa and Ivy more. And I also need to give Saito a poke.

asldja;lsdja thank you saraaaah /clings to

I think lately I haven't been as good with Amy as I could be, so I think I'm gonna do a canon-review one of these days to get her voice properly right again, but I'm so happy that you like her alsdjasd her friendship with Bucky is one of my favourite things and oh man, Eleven. ELEVEN!

Rhodey would make the bestest husband. Fact.

Basically what you're saying is that we don't have enough tags yet? Because I can get behind that idea. Really. /eyes inbox :D

Reviewing will be both of our friends. But I have never had a problem with your Amy, she is divine and wonderful and makes both my Poly boys very happy with her friendship. /cluthces.

Ahahahaha, we just keep feeding off each other.

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archivy - 2012-03-11 11:23 (UTC) - Expand

LMFAO CRY I DON'T KNOW WHERE TO EVEN START...

I just have a lot of fun with all of your characters, Tona! I really look forward to what we have planned with Ivy, Eames' and Rhodey's barking, and hopefully more threads between Tessa and Eames now that they have so much in common, just an entirely different spectrum when it comes to approaching it - it fascinates both me and Eames!

As for Saito, I think he's great! He has a very distinct business-with-pleasure sort of attitude when it comes to the way he speaks that I think you do a great job with - the only thing I would suggest is maybe if you wanted to dick around with a possible prose or action log with brackets, we could practice his internal thoughts and stuff like that? :) Up to you! \o

ALWAYS AT THE BEGINNING? Or is that not imaginative enough ;;

Eames' and Rhodey's interaction was wonderful and alskjdaj IN CASE YOU HADN'T NOTICED i'm kind of really looking forward to family day an awful lot u.u /the least subtle and Tessa and Eames just need all the interaction. I think Tessa can learn a lot from Eames in terms of self-confidence and confidence in her abilities and what it means to Change/forge someone else, idk, and maybe Eames can learn something from her as well.

Haha, yeah. I should definitely practice his internal thoughts. For the most part I haven't done that because— well, I shouldn't quite know where to start. I think if I'm really apping him here, I'll need to come up with a proper background for him, if only so that I have some sort of reference for myself. I both love and hate that about Inception, how much freedom it gives //

you play such a wide variety of muses. i'm forever amazed and impressed at how you manage to keep all of their voices separate and so distinctly them. all the applause for that. ♥

adkhjaskdjha thank you so much i think their voices are the most difficult thing for me and the area i need to work in the most so hearing this really means a lot, thank you u.u

Rhodey is a comforting presence for Pepper, and I always enjoy their interactions. I keep meaning to have her tag Amy, because I think they would be fantastic together, and I really enjoyed her that one time I threaded with my Rory.

Rhodey is everyone's rock, I love it. We need for them to interact more, I think, because their interactions are indeed very enjoyable. And yess throw Pepper at Amy. Kickass Ginger Ladies, unite!

Tessa is a brilliant character. There is just so much that can be done and embellished with her in tags through both speech and actions and I see you really trying with her all the time to get that through in your tags. While I've read The Mortal Instruments and know the world she's from, I haven't read the books she's in yet but they're on my to-read list mostly because of some of the tags I've seen from you with her. So kudos to you!

Sometimes I wish Amy had as much characterization in her tags as Tessa does. And I think this is something you go back and forth on so it isn't an all the time thing. Sometimes she's spot on and sometimes she sounds like any other character. And we all have those days where we just aren't feeling it or where things just aren't coming out right so I completely get it. I've been playing Derek in some form for so many years that I realized toward the end of last year that my tags with him had gotten really flat. I've been really having to work on him lately to make sure there's more there for both his characterization and for people to have enough to respond to.

Maybe just listen a little more for her specific voice in your head when writing her tags? Of course I JUST finished re-watching what's out of her seasons with all the Rory/Amy love (insert fangirl squee here as I hope you get another Rory soon) and I hear her very clearly right now. That will go away soon, I'm sure. lol

I love Iron Man and I really need to try to get in on some tags with him. And The Archive, I know nothing of.

Anyway that's all I can give you even though it isn't much, I know. Sorry I talked about Amy so much. It's the fandom out of all your famdoms that I know the best! lol ♥

aldjlasj thank you so much for this comment!

I'm really glad that you enjoy Tessa and that her tags made you put those books on the to-read list. I really enjoyed the first one in particular. The second, not so much. I have issues with the second one, but ah, they're still enjoyable reads, really! It's a wonderful thing to hear that her characterisation comes across so well!

When it comes to Amy, I think you're absolutely right. Some days, her voice just... isn't quite there and she becomes more generic, I suppose? It's definitely something I'm going to work on. Today before answering her tags, I spent just five minutes re-watching some DW and listening to her speech patterns and it made such a difference for me in having her voice in my head. I think I'm generally okay on her characterisation, but it's her voice that I need to work on, so I'm going to focus on that. Adding some in brackets characterisation might also help (which I think you meant?) is a brilliant idea as well and should force me to consider her more carefully when replying to people. I think I have a nice list of things I can do to make Amy's voice better and less flat/generic again. I'm definitely going to work on her. Thank you so much for pointing this all out and offering suggestions ♥!

Don't worry about talking much about Amy, I really appreciate it and I think she's the one I need to work most on, so it's definitely warranted u.u

Yeah, I've heard they're really good books! And I love that universe so I do look forward to reading them and seeing Tessa in them!

YES! That really helps, doesn't it? Even just watching one episode or part of an episode. I have to do that sometimes too. I say 'have to' like it's such a chore to watch Doctor Who or Criminal Minds or Buffy. It really isn't, but it does help with the whole voice thing!

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archivy - 2012-03-09 19:35 (UTC) - Expand

WHERE TO START?

Rhodey! Okay, the position he's in with interacting with Howard is understandable and awkward and whatnot because he's his son's best friend, but that makes it glorious, and I really hope we can thread more with them in future, especially when Howard finally catches on. But your Rhodey, god, I love him. You play the soldier side, which is there, the fact that he's strong and independent, but then he's also this big softy beneath, and he cares about things. I don't know, I seriously just love him.

Amy makes me laugh. She's so Amy-like and wonderful, and Howard's kind of scared of her, but jdkhg she's so spot-on. She's got that feisty, bossy side, but then she's fun and nice in and around it.

I don't really know much of Archive, but she's adorable, and I think Howard should always check up on her. Also, he finds her curious, it's a genius thing. You're just a great RPer and I find it easy to bounce off you in threads, and you're the sweetest to talk to. :3

Edited 2012-03-09 20:03 (UTC)

aldkjla;jsd darling thank you ;;

I adore the awkwardness between Rhodey and Howard, and just generally their interaction, it is a wonderful thing okay. And ahaha I'm glad that those aspects of Rhodey come through well enough! I don't really have much experience playing soldiers or even any reference for the mindframe, so I'm glad I'm not completely screwing it up, yes. And he cares so much, it's one of those things I like about him.

Amy is the most feisty bossy lady I have. I adore playing her. Must do some canon-reviews with her to make sure her voice doesn't slip, but yesss glad to hear you enjoy her and her voice! \o/

Howard absolutely needs to continue checking up on Ivy. Because of reasons. I require this.

aldsjalsj I'm glad you think so! /hugs

:D

ifdhgkeg you could never screw up Rhodey! Seriously, he's the best thing ever, and I want all of the excuses to bother him so much more.

Canon reviewing never hurts, but she really is great already.

Muahaha. He will. He knows nothing of children, but he can make it up as he goes and they can be ridiculous.

Amy is the only one of yours I know, and you know, I really need to make sure I tag her more often because you play her brilliantly and I have a lot of fun when I do.

The others I can't comment on, but I do enjoy the threads I've seen for them.

Amy and Nathan and their... sort of antagonistic friendship is wonderful and fun. We should definitely do more of it, yes yes :D

Thank you <3

Really I need to get back to tagging your characters more. I love Tessa a lot. She's a difficult character to get I think because she's been transplanted from another time period but you're doing a beautiful job with her & that transplant.

Amy has got to be difficult because of all the weirdness canon has put her through and I think sometimes you struggle with her voice but lately I've noticed she seems to have gotten more consistent and seems to flow a bit better so kudos to you for getting her and keeping her on track.

I need to hit up Ivy and Rhodey with my guys as well just because Ivy seems like she'll be fun and Rhodey I know is a cool character. They both are interesting to read and a lot of fun in any case.

I really enjoy playing Tessa, she's so interesting and the transplant is actually quite fun to play with, really.

Amy... yeah. Amy is probably the one I struggle most with, so my goal for now is to do some canon reviewing and just getting her voice straight in my head. I need to work on her a bit, but I think I've already started picking it up a bit, so if that's noticeable, yay! :D

I shall welcome any and all characters you throw at them /reaches for

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